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    dots Submission Name: THE DEMIURGE dots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.17 - 313/245/333
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Prose/The pain inside
    Total Views: 32
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    Bytes: 852



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    dotsTHE DEMIURGE dots
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    Intoxication through

    thought;

    embers to a treacherous smoke

    The Demiurge.

    Evolution yields to the material world

    devised to meet the demands

    of modern sex-appeal

    The human body...

    Separate

    a mantelpiece;

    wrought through division

    To convey the intellect’s infatuations.

    Standard

    preeminence

    in its contemporary state

    Damned in its attractions.

    Fate

    converged subconscious

    ahead of the penumbra, lies

    An absolute darkness.

    The Spirit

    of man is laden with Hell

    the living, undead

    Reign over desensitized man.




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