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    Author: poetotoe
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    Booking a Flight

    Her grief hangs around her neck
    as a jewelers scale fished them out
    for upon her vision, I started to glare
    some know she lost someone very dear.

    Goodbyes always hurt the ones you love
    most of all if love was not finished by two
    and if the opportunity you missed once again
    all your potentials get dismissed over and over.

    Painfully she gazed back to the deep black abyss
    to dream of what could have been the love of her life.
    The great abyss called her back into the hole in her heart
    loneliness entered into her skin; call 911, she has fallen in!

    But she heard a whisper in the wind falling in. Love Lives!
    She witnessed the Sun's Diamonds as facets in fallen snow.
    A lone lark appears to sing to her, alone deep in her abyss
    in a song, she only knows and remembers her love forgot.

    Step back from your abyss this Lark sings to her alone
    you cannot conquer a sea, your river of tears yourself
    the Lark cries out you were never left behind, child
    it turned into a Gold Eagle on its way to paradise.




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