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    dots Submission Name: subtle realitydots

    Author: cornonthekob
    Elite Ratio:    6.24 - 666/488/434
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotssubtle realitydots

    i can think about breathing without forgetting how to
    it doesn't mean that much if i get distracted at all
    it's hard to hold onto, the reality of a moment
    but it doesn't have to lead me to a fall

    if it added up to anything i wouldn't subtract it from my mind
    but at the moment it's a distraction from what needs me in my life

    it's cold to feel that a belief is pointless
    but i wouldn't regard them as something to gain
    i'd rather get grounded in what i know
    the halls of my home and the smell of the rain

    there is nothing wrong with knowing your place
    down on the ground or out in the race
    there is little to hold when you can't tell what is real
    but it's the place that i go that tells me how to feel

    there is little to it but lights and granite
    empty white walls in a room with no windows
    the images flashing is what keeps me awake
    i wonder how long before the image grows

    but if i admit that i tend to imagine
    if i shovel the walks and tend to the yard
    then half of it real is enough to live with
    even half of the truth can carry you, if only so far

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      This is beautiful.
    "i can think about breathing without forgetting how to", my favorite line.
    Fantastic closing that holds everything together.
    Thank you for sharing!
    | Posted on 2020-02-20 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]

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