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    dots Submission Name: antagonist.(fiction)dots

    Author: cornonthekob
    Elite Ratio:    6.13 - 675/504/469
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Story/What you did
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    got my fingers coiled and clenched up tight
    irritated and i might be looking for a fight
    i'm sick of all the things they say and do
    the sickness in me is starting to shine right through

    i can only keep it secret for so long
    before i try to murder you with a song
    my appetite for violence grows and grows
    as i hide the bodies where nobody ever goes

    your pulse is delicious as it fades away
    the blood washes off and there are no stains
    who would want to be wracked with all the guilt
    of the people who you did or did not kill

    Submitted on 2020-02-26 12:45:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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