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    dots Submission Name: far sighteddots

    Author: cornonthekob
    Elite Ratio:    6.24 - 666/488/434
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsfar sighteddots

    you don't make me feel the way i did
    maybe it's just something i dismiss
    but pieces of that past just do not fit
    i wonder what i do and do not get

    my heart no longer sings the way it did
    i was so naive just like a little kid
    you start to surface in me once again
    i can't relieve this fever from my head

    wouldn't it be sweet to fall in love
    but every time i try push comes to shove
    cuz i can't even fake those pretty words
    trying to just makes my heart grow hurt

    there's little to the fantasy of the day
    the sun won't come to wash it all away
    fragments of the dream will steal my sight
    but that just doesn't mean that i am blind

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