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    dots Submission Name: Swan Divedots
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    Author: poetotoe
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    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsSwan Divedots
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    Swan Dive

    In a deserted pool of desires, I dared to swim
    naked by sins, my passions lay stilled by life
    by you, each stroke, taken against my soul.

    I don't regret staying afloat by my desires
    the dreams we shared in a pool two dove
    seconds that's all it took to break a neck.

    Suspended in thin air my love sacrificed
    I can no longer swim in, I want to float
    a pool that never fills I lay on its floor.

    A dream that I cannot wake this time
    forgive me my love, I too dove into
    I wait for you to swim beside me.




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