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    dots Submission Name: Everyone's Mountaindots
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    Author: eggshells
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 30/80/74
    Words: 397
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/The pain inside
    Total Views: 168
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1885



    Description:
       Was listening to some old blues and this kinda spilled out of me. Typed as it came out then did my own spacing/editing code block format. I like how it turned out. Let me know what u think!


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    dotsEveryone's Mountaindots
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    I'm going up a mountain.
    There's no way around it.

    Can't go under.
    Can't go through.

    Up and over's the only way.

    If I had the water,
    I'd wash this all away.

    If I had wings,
    I'd blow it all away.

    But wishes and prayers haven't helped me yet.

    No, dreaming and worrying have yet to do me good.

    So, here I go.
    Over a mountain.
    Up and over I go.

    Won't stop, even though I can.
    No, I won't stop,
    even though you may want me to.

    Here I see houses,
    made by men.

    I see these houses,
    built on dead ends.

    Oh these houses,
    made of red.

    Oh all these houses,
    with no rooms for bed.

    So I hike on,
    I stumble,
    and I fall.

    I get back up,
    trip,
    and hobble on.

    My mind becoming my burden,
    weighing on my shoulders.

    The past licks at my heels,
    while the future moves on ahead.

    The present all below me,
    hard to see.

    I'm going up a mountain.

    Up until,
    down is the only way to go.

    Not knowing if it will be
    easier than before.

    Oh, I'm going up a mountain.

    Up,
    the only way to go.

    The sun is gonna shine,
    the rain is gonna fall,
    and that wind is gonna blow.

    Up and over a mountain.
    Everyone has to go.

    Up and over a mountain.
    Up's the only way to go.




    Submitted on 2020-04-09 00:50:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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