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    dots Submission Name: Hodgepodgedots
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    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.94 - 2138/2101/1700
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHodgepodgedots
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         Gemini:

         You're are the lyric - thousands of little eddies there
         at the edge of one strong current,
         like as fingerprints, different as fingerprints -
         each of them demanding my attention, testing me,
         passing me, failing me, unsure if you want to be
         drawn in.



         what you don't understand though - - - is eventually
         i will get to all of you.


         

         like the kid - with her finger poked in the hole of a dam,
         working it, to a trickle, worrying it -until a great torrent
         burst forth.


         what you don't understand is
         i could not tell you i loved you
         until i loved you.







         you are as the child, who has been washed away, asking her
         little questions.






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