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    dots Submission Name: More Numb Than Novocainedots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMore Numb Than Novocainedots
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    You're like one of those books
    that you buy at an airport
    to read on a dull layover
    that has a cover in your favorite color
    and looks so pretty
    but when you open it,
    The pages might as well be blank
    because what is inside
    leaves you more numb than novocaine.




    Submitted on 2004-08-07 19:18:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Pretty covers hide some mundane stuff. Just like with people...ha.

    Number than novacaine. Now that is pretty dull. It is hard enough to stay awake at the airport. It's like being in a whole weird world of it's own. Especially during lay-overs. Trapped in the concrete city where it costs $2 for a coke. I hate flying.
    | Posted on 2004-08-13 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      when i saw the title, it took me a second to realize you were speaking of being numb rather about a number! i think we all know people like this, so very pretty on the outside but shallow as can be when you try to dig deeper. i never read those novels 'cause i know they'll be just as you suggested, empty and without any feeling. my only suggestion would be to change "That" to "It" in the fourth line... "It has a cover..." as usual, you sum up a situation in short order! good job!
    | Posted on 2004-08-08 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Never judge a book by...
    I like the use of the book to give us the person and the frailty of ourselves when we reach for what looks to be just what we want if not need.
    Neatly done.
    K
    | Posted on 2004-08-08 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't think you're so angry, you just don't like that guy. really original comparison between this guy and some book you buy at the airport. really good poem. I enjoyed reading it.
    | Posted on 2004-08-08 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      you do that subtle anger really well. your 'angry' poetry has this very controlled sort of rage to it.. i think even rage is too strong a word to use.. it's like... when you take a sip from lemonade and the bitterness makes you cringe.. i guess it's kinda like that. i think that makes for a much more powerful statement.
    | Posted on 2004-08-08 00:00:00 | by girlinthephoto | [ Reply to This ]
      Blunt and to the point. This was very good and I enjoyed reading it a lot. I love poems that are simple but say more then ones that are drug out and long just to be long. Great work with this.

    Thank you for posting it.
    | Posted on 2004-08-07 00:00:00 | by abby2391 | [ Reply to This ]
      true to form .. i like this but it really hits hard. like a gold plated cement brick smacking me in the jaw...good job.
    | Posted on 2004-08-07 00:00:00 | by pyrestarter | [ Reply to This ]


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