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    dots Submission Name: Metamorphosis/Changesdots
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    Author: eggshells
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 31/82/75
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMetamorphosis/Changesdots
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    I dwell within
    Someone else's shell.

    I trundle about,
    Searching for a new cell.

    Sedated,
    I feel that I feel
    Unwell.

    Metamorphosis willing,
    I will become something new.

    The changes are chilling,
    Begging me to glue.

    Broken,
    The pieces have blown,
    Through.

    Gathered around me,
    I can see where they belong.

    Crawling down this path,
    Ever long.

    Unlocked,
    This door leads me to
    Wrong.






    Submitted on 2020-07-05 00:46:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is more of a criticism,
    having the tone and form of a poem.
    It could be that the author is revealing something about themselves as of transformation. Could be. Most likely not.
    Looking closer; it's just a thread writing about another person the author has a dislike or distaste for.
    Basically undermining the growth of a person
    by telling them they are doing something the "Wrong" way.
    Solely off the fact that the author does not like
    this "something" that is done.

    Whomever is on the other end of the criticism
    shouldn't ever walk on eggshells,
    in regards to those who have an insecurity
    about what is contrary to their own creations.
    Whether it be madness or not.
    These type of short given threads
    are more of a wasted energy and time.
    All under the saying of "Less is more".

    Sometimes people don't have anything real to draft about,
    no matter how serious they take themselves.
    How do threads like this help anyone?
    This reveals a disinterest, not actual facts
    about the object or person who undergoes the "metamorphosis".

    It may almost be safe to say that the author dissected someone else's content, then spent half a day contemplating on how to respond with a criticism.
    One cannot cope with someone
    because something is in them rather than on them.
    Should the person undergoing changes
    need a crowd to tell them what they do
    shouldn't ever be validated? I think not.

    In reality. Aside from what is revealed online.
    We don't know how people really live,
    what they experience or deed upon
    for the sake of their "metamorphosis".
    One wouldn't have anything really immensely important,
    to be prioritizing when they are playing the guessing game about how a faceless individual is living the wrong way.

    The only way I currently see this inspiring anyone
    is by a group effort of agreement.
    In conjunction with a number of people practicing
    some sort of insignificant mockery. Directed at this subject.
    Who has supposedly mutated "Wrong".
    Is it possible the author has a pleasure
    in watching people remain stagnate somehow?
    We don't know.
    We just know that there's too much focus
    on what the subject is doing that is different
    from how the author feels it should be done.
    The author probably doesn't care at all
    about a genuine description that
    the subject contributes anywhere.

    Boring.
    Finger point directed.
    Dry.
    Created from discontent
    of another piece of content.

    I would yawn myself to shit if the author expected me to walk on eggshells about how I practice my creativity.


    Next. Moving forward.


    | Posted on 2020-08-01 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      Metamorphosis is a very dramatic occurrence biologically.
    as you are breaking out of your pupa / chrysalis I can see
    the possibilities of starting afresh.
    change is always a bit frightening ..even when changes are for the best.
    I am sorry that unlocking the door at the end of the path doesn't lead to something more meaningful, life changing and / or dramatic. you will have your reasons of course ... and there is no need to explain ... i just feel disappointed with the ending.

    otherwise i was stimulated to respond. so thank you.
    | Posted on 2020-07-24 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]


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