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    dots Submission Name: Flutterdots

    Author: BrokenLove
    Elite Ratio:    0.19 - 0/1/4
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    My dreams flutter around me,
    like butterflies, beautiful and elusive.
    Bright hues of yellow and blue engulf me
    and yet I am only now able to take a breath.
    I extend my hand,
    a regal monarch butterfly lands on my palm.
    our eyes meet, and a most curious thing happens
    a silent exchange.
    Then the floor collapses and I'm falling
    the butterflies fly up and around me
    almost like I'm lifted on their wings
    I'm like Alice down the rabbit hole
    filled with excitement, but riddled with anxiety.
    The colors disperse and slowly begin to fade away
    and darkness begins to flood on all sides,
    panic sets in. I begin to kick and scream, but still, I'm falling.
    THUD! I've finally reached the bottom.
    I struggled to try and stand on the strange spongy ground.
    and began quickly look around, fear clutching at my heart.
    I see nothing only darkness. I fall to my knees in despair and salty warm tears begin to flow down my cheeks.
    Then I feel it, a little flutter.

    Submitted on 2020-07-10 23:10:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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