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    dots Submission Name: on the backs of handsdots
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    Author: Awkward
    ASL Info:    246/In chains.../Q8
    Elite Ratio:    5.34 - 1618/1679/280
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       henna me up...


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    dotson the backs of handsdots
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    here.
    and now .
    in this arid land
    we see how the backs of hands carry pictures that spell water.
    and god.

    (so is henna just another stairway,
    on which graceful movement is oppressed by black wool
    and the fevered corruption of a prophet's will?)

    and her sad eyes recount one thousand and one tales:
    some are tragic;
    still others cruel but
    all of them are beautiful in their way.

    (and you would know
    that i have swum in the perfect asymmetry of those eyes
    and i have drawn glyphs on the backs of a water hunter's hands,
    with fingers better made for drawing a bow).

    yes we choose the marks that our hands might make,
    so that they may be lost,
    in the way that the rub' al khali might swallow them
    or so that they may be found,
    in the way of those that might travel up to moons...




    Submitted on 2020-07-11 23:24:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      through the eye of horus:




    with head raised and hood dilated, uraeus,
    sought her prey.

    the cup of kindness
    felt the sharp bite;
    the sacred mark of envenomation
    | Posted on 2020-07-19 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]
      some of the ladies are so creative and skillful when they add the henna and the places that henna ends up never ceases to amaze me! i walked into a salon two Eids ago to see a young lady bicycling her legs in order to dry the henna on the bottom of her feet. i always think it looks very sad and shabby though when it begins to wear off. tbc
    | Posted on 2020-07-18 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]


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