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    Author: cornonthekob
    Elite Ratio:    6.23 - 668/490/444
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
    Total Views: 52
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    I know who i am
    damned be the memory
    but off with the head
    of the same shifting melody

    smiles crack behind the surface
    gather your wits and look to the stars
    you can decide if this eye is useless
    it can only show you what you already are
    a healthier course
    but i'm not hungry to eat
    when all that you want
    is self defeat

    i'm seing the sun for the first time
    calling it love was the first lie
    you're better than me and i'm better without
    so let's not forget what we're yelling about

    it's harder than hell when you see me
    your face is still painted with our memories
    the shine in your eues isn't mine now
    so throw me away for another broken melody

    the things we need
    these songs we sing
    they only speak the force
    of humanities routine
    i'm not the one
    for summer sun
    i'm not that fun
    and you will see

    that i might have been the one back then
    and i know you really wanna pretend

    but the best of things come to an end
    and i am just your memory
    you don't even know me
    don't deserve to hold me
    so fade away
    into yesterday
    when i still had a song to sing.




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      https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TagyGLwoBds&list=RD7yHsXfB7VqM&index=2
    | Posted on 2020-08-21 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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