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    dots Submission Name: Beadsdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 137/247/161
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBeadsdots
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    My hip dislodged, it stutters, bends
    towards the sky: a glassy languid face hung
    against the window. Do curl against
    the corner of my eye, from thrown
    bas-relief of lamp -- so i feel nothing,
    save for extension
    from drinking too much wine.
    Forgive my innocence -it gave back to the gods,
    like beads of perspiration
    against the small of back, gave back
    to gravity.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Very thought provoking, thanks. This does not dictate a story so much as it invites one's own trying to place things, if you know what I mean. "give back to the gods" is always a good idea.
    Sometimes I get the feeling that the gods favor the occasional drinking of "too much wine", or other such mind adjustments.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2020-08-22 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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