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    dots Submission Name: shadows in my roomdots
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    Author: cornonthekob
    Elite Ratio:    6.17 - 672/497/459
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsshadows in my roomdots
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    i remember those days
    heading for the bottom
    you were there in a way
    swept into the conundrum

    i can't escape my reality
    subjective as it may be
    i never knew you
    and you never knew me

    hard to get my hands around
    i know you've lost your grip
    a part of me should know by now
    i'm on a sinking ship

    little notes like memories take the saner side of me
    and i am swept into the fantasy, binging on the remedy
    burn it out, and leave embers for tomorrows fires
    i'll keep it under tongue lest the sickness make me a liar

    four to one odds on the chance that i'll collapse
    looking for an answer to the voices in my head
    i've heard you die a thousand times so it's no surprise when you leave
    tomorrow asks for order and borrows me a song

    let me believe that it's all a dream
    cuz it's impossible to know, and harder to see
    i've lost my patience to the trees
    contracting syptoms of a disease




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