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    dots Submission Name: heaven is the high that no one knowsdots
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    Author: cornonthekob
    Elite Ratio:    6.13 - 675/504/469
    Words: 283
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 185
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    dotsheaven is the high that no one knowsdots
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    hide me from my innocence
    my mind is begging to be bent
    the feeling never changes
    when i'm low

    another night's hysteria
    i know i would be scarin' ya
    if you knew the way
    it really goes

    i'm sick of living double lives
    can't tell the truth from all these lies

    you're looking in but can you see
    the sickness from the truth in me

    i kind of like the way it hurts
    rubbing my eyes in the dirt
    is this what i'm meant to be
    is this just what i deserve

    if i steal the melody
    will you sing a song for me
    the truth is up to us to hide or show
    as of now there is no crowd
    to lift us up or pull us down
    heaven is the high that no one knows

    take me from my normalized
    feelings i'll desensitize
    meditation lets it bleed
    more slow

    keep me in the underground
    where kings and queens are less profound
    than the chosen ones who hear
    the way it goes

    but i'm sick of living double lives
    i feel so desensitized
    you're looking in but can not see
    the bigger better parts of me

    i kind of like the way it hurts
    rubbing my eyes in the dirt
    is this what i'm meant to be
    is this just what i deserve

    if i steal the melody
    will you sing a song for me
    the truth is up to us to hide or show
    as of now there is no crowd
    to lift us up or pull us down
    heaven is the high that no one knows




    Submitted on 2020-09-22 21:47:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this one, but then I'm a pushover for some good rhyme. This sounds like a song the way the repeats go. Favorite was
    keep me in the underground
    where kings and queens are less profound
    than the chosen ones who hear
    the way it goes

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2020-10-09 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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