It might just be me, but I had a little trouble reading through this without having to go back and find a smoother route. It's just a little choppy which makes the reading a bit troublesome. Considered further, perhaps that is deliberate as the message itself is troublesome or about a troubled relationship. It is as if the speaker/writer is kind of choking and or sobbing through this, being very emotional and distraught. Unfortunately, my personal mental walls and filters tend to block or at least try to block the pain that others emote. It's not that I'm a cold bastard, it's just that I don't deal with pain very well whether it's myself or others. Some people can identify quite well with a poem like this but do they comment? Perhaps no because they do not wish to risk causing any more pain by commenting. I recognize cornonthecob as having been quite productive here on this poetry site for a very long time. You are owed comments even if they might be off base because that is what this site is supposed to be good for. To me this kind of poem makes me worry if the author is really working through some pain or simply being creative, or both. Anyway, it is a rainy day and thus the poem is fitting incidence wise. Thanks!