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    dots Submission Name: elliedots

    Author: cornonthekob
    Elite Ratio:    6.17 - 672/497/458
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    our prologue played out through staged whispers
    because no one knew our stories needed told
    we hold on to the feeling of a circumstance
    as the novelty wears off and our minds grow old

    you are a stranger in any other time
    we are connected by the cable lines
    it makes me wonder how we would be different
    if we never leapt on the inside

    this is just for you and me so i'll be deliberate
    half of what i've created was created by accident
    as the tiny violins play i remember faces from the real world
    another interesting day where the moments unfurl

    keep wide awake no matter what your eyes tell you
    we're working towards understanding,
    knowing only our own truths
    keeping up with what they're demanding

    i like it when it's different
    it helps me dismiss the experience
    i can't talk about it
    so thinking it's real seems
    pointless regardless

    Submitted on 2020-10-15 17:27:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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