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    dots Submission Name: industry pressuresdots
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    Author: cornonthekob
    Elite Ratio:    6.13 - 673/504/464
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsindustry pressuresdots
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    can i breathe and think like me
    light a candle for beliefs
    or run away like a thief
    from this bitter broken industry

    how about an ounce of respect
    for every ounce of sweat
    i'm sick of stick to what you know
    i want to find a way to go

    anything is better than this same haunting frequency
    you can see what i say, we can hear each other think
    talk about an unexplainable situation
    it takes two degrees to join the argument

    i am just the idiot
    wafting through the artifacts
    as the pieces surround me
    i notice patterns in them

    give me a brain scan
    or a reason to give a damn
    about understanding these thoughts
    cuz they're getting out of hand




    Submitted on 2020-10-24 18:07:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Interesting... you are invited to check this earlier work of mine out. Not a poem, but it gives some of my thoughts on what is happening to the human brain over time. Hint, nothing induces evolution so well as stress.

    https://brackenbridge.blogspot.com/2018/12/the-endorphin-rush-of-scientific.html

    Kindest regards and have a great weekend!

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2020-10-24 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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