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    dots Submission Name: be hind the seensdots
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    Author: cornonthekob
    Elite Ratio:    6.13 - 673/504/464
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsbe hind the seensdots
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    i don't hear what you heard
    i think that back-words is better
    just enough to keep me up
    and keep my world held together

    delusion is a fine conclusion
    even when it's fun to play along with
    the worst part is the confusion
    trying to keep up with the last bit

    it doesn't smother me when i'm medicated
    it's more like an over active imagination
    even if at times it becomes too complicated
    i know how to interpret the situation

    somatic sensations lead me to believe
    an alternative reality
    i'm sitting on the top of a small field
    with a view of the kings

    it's all i'm not in this conflicted collage
    the infinite spin in a sinners mirage
    over and over you spin me the same
    closer than ever to feeling insane

    snap me back if i collapse
    drugs are fun the first relapse
    high beats low is all i know
    and boy does it distract

    so what am i left with
    what not to say
    celebrity guest list
    for my psychotic serenades




    Submitted on 2020-11-15 13:37:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice word plays. Always makes for an interesting read. Thanks.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2020-11-29 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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