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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 60/66/40
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 29
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    Bytes: 1293



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    To all my friends out there
    that call me flake,
    I mean fake.
    Please understand
    I do not contact you when I am bored.
    I'm only allowed out to play
    when my depressions at bay.
    And very seldomly does she take a vacay
    Her and my anxiety are workaholics.
    But I'm sure beating on me everyday
    can be exhausting
    I mean shit, even I'm tired.
    So when I cancel plans last minute-
    Please forgive me.
    I've fought all day for us,
    believe me.
    At one point I thought I'd won,
    I even got all dressed up
    As they watched me the entire time
    with that knowing grin.
    Waiting for their second wind
    Seems to be an inside joke.
    I know you didn't find it funny,
    as you angrily respond
    "No worries"
    But I will.
    All night long.
    Mascara down my cheeks,
    lipstick smudged sheets.
    They put on a marathon.
    Dissecting every
    Message.
    Picture.
    Post.
    Surely you must hate me.
    I know you don't know about them.
    And how could you?
    They blend into my smile, so perfectly.
    Ah. There's the culprit.




    Submitted on 2020-11-18 03:10:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      While the feelings expressed in this poem are not things that I would ever wish to feel, the story you told did an almost supernatural job of conveying those feelings. I felt trapped like some sort of caged animal...not able to free myself, not able to do what I wanted to do...trapped and alone.

    I don't know if the demons you spoke of are real or just part of your story. If they are real, know that you can overcome anything...but sometimes, the demoms will win, and sometimes they will lose. Keep fighting them! If your story is the result of an excellent imagining, I commend you! In either case, I was glad I read your submission.

    Take care,

    Kelly
    | Posted on 2020-11-20 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]


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