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Submission Name:
unfinished song
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Author:
cornonthekob
Elite Ratio:
6.13 - 674/504/464
Words:
246
Class/Type:
Lyrics/Serious
Total Views:
80
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Bytes:
1495
Description:
unfinished song
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i need a little break now from
the things i have and haven't done
you'd think by now that i'd of won
a piece of my mind
throughout the downhill winding road
the answer's ever left unknown
uncertianty has grown and grown
here in my mind
and if you don't mind
i'd like to take the time
to see just what i need from all this mess
time and time again
you spin within my head
the time you take is just to make more stress
there is no chorus to this song
i can not write my every wrong
you've got me tied around you tight
another question for the night
take your time and mask my mind
that piece of me i can't define
you hold me down and shut my eyes
i can not seem to lose you
leave me peace when i'm in need
your needles make me itch and bleed
you leave behind your poison seeds
what does it take to lose you
and if you don't mind
i'd like to take the time
to see just what i need from all this mess
time and time again
you spin within my head
the time you take is just to make more stress
there is no chorus to this song
i can not write my every wrong
you've got me tied around you tight
another question for the night
Submitted on 2020-12-03 13:38:29
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