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    dots Submission Name: unfinished songdots
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    Author: cornonthekob
    Elite Ratio:    6.13 - 675/504/469
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 147
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    dotsunfinished songdots
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    i need a little break now from
    the things i have and haven't done
    you'd think by now that i'd of won
    a piece of my mind

    throughout the downhill winding road
    the answer's ever left unknown
    uncertianty has grown and grown
    here in my mind

    and if you don't mind
    i'd like to take the time
    to see just what i need from all this mess

    time and time again
    you spin within my head
    the time you take is just to make more stress

    there is no chorus to this song
    i can not write my every wrong
    you've got me tied around you tight
    another question for the night

    take your time and mask my mind
    that piece of me i can't define
    you hold me down and shut my eyes
    i can not seem to lose you

    leave me peace when i'm in need
    your needles make me itch and bleed
    you leave behind your poison seeds
    what does it take to lose you

    and if you don't mind
    i'd like to take the time
    to see just what i need from all this mess

    time and time again
    you spin within my head
    the time you take is just to make more stress

    there is no chorus to this song
    i can not write my every wrong
    you've got me tied around you tight
    another question for the night




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