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    dots Submission Name: Repastdots

    Author: Blue Monk
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1573/461/128
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 129
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    be it fe, be it fo
    for which mirthful minx muses
    such lashings of soul
    must impose we suppose
    either light into dark
    or the dark into light
    ere that tending towards gray
    prove cold winters day

    a new game to play
    to continence sway
    which must burst either way
    in two brilliances fair
    adding colors as bent

    most divinely sent
    the great void to avoid
    should the gods be annoyed
    so forever to go
    neither fe, neither fo
    but aglow
    as if properly mixed

    Submitted on 2020-12-15 23:03:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Like it. It’s playful, doesn’t take itself too seriously, has some beautiful alliterations, consistent rhythm, fast paced like a game of ping pong.

    Such is our fate I guess, to be stuck between two sides, right and wrong, yet either way is still ok :)
    | Posted on 2020-12-26 00:00:00 | by expiring_touch | [ Reply to This ]
      i like what i see so far.

    most divinely sent
    the great void to avoid
    should the gods be annoyed

    my favorite lines.

    i think you could leave it as is or you could expand upon it. it's really up to whether it fully expresses what you're trying to express.
    | Posted on 2020-12-20 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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