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    dots Submission Name: the longest journey dots

    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 138/253/167
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe longest journey dots

    I would have robbed you
    blind, my own eyes
    with a film of breath,
    it’s sticking to the eyelash,
    tries its best to leave,
    to jump across and through
    thick layers of the atmosphere,
    reach in between of space
    and moment, stretch itself
    five-fold like gravity, and
    reconcile meaning — to
    what it is but not expected,
    conserving energy.
    But now- you are, you are
    aware, like silk drops to the floor
    with the lightest breeze
    that leans into your face and roots
    of thinning hair — it is
    the longest journey.

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      Thought provoking bordering on scientific. Somehow it makes me reflect upon my growing older, but everyone will have their own interpretation on anything, from what I've seen.

    How are things in Hamburg lately? Back in '78-'79 my native German Language teacher once told us that we simply must visit Hamburg sometime. I haven't made it yet and it's getting harder to travel abroad, but one never knows? I wrote one poem where I used some of what little German I could muster. I don't think it's in my collection here but I will try to rectify that soon.

    Thanks for commenting on one of my poems.

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