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the longest journey

Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173
Words: 98
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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the longest journey

I would have robbed you
blind, my own eyes
with a film of breath,
it’s sticking to the eyelash,
tries its best to leave,
to jump across and through
thick layers of the atmosphere,
reach in between of space
and moment, stretch itself
five-fold like gravity, and
reconcile meaning — to
what it is but not expected,
conserving energy.
But now- you are, you are
aware, like silk drops to the floor
with the lightest breeze
that leans into your face and roots
of thinning hair — it is
the longest journey.

Submitted on 2020-12-26 13:03:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Thought provoking bordering on scientific. Somehow it makes me reflect upon my growing older, but everyone will have their own interpretation on anything, from what I've seen.

How are things in Hamburg lately? Back in '78-'79 my native German Language teacher once told us that we simply must visit Hamburg sometime. I haven't made it yet and it's getting harder to travel abroad, but one never knows? I wrote one poem where I used some of what little German I could muster. I don't think it's in my collection here but I will try to rectify that soon.

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