the longest journey

Author: expiring_touch ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173 Words: 98

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the longest journey

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I would have robbed you blind, my own eyes with a film of breath, it’s sticking to the eyelash, tries its best to leave, to jump across and through thick layers of the atmosphere, reach in between of space and moment, stretch itself five-fold like gravity, and reconcile meaning — to what it is but not expected, conserving energy. But now- you are, you are aware, like silk drops to the floor with the lightest breeze that leans into your face and roots of thinning hair — it is the longest journey.

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Thought provoking bordering on scientific. Somehow it makes me reflect upon my growing older, but everyone will have their own interpretation on anything, from what I've seen. How are things in Hamburg lately? Back in '78-'79 my native German Language teacher once told us that we simply must visit Hamburg sometime. I haven't made it yet and it's getting harder to travel abroad, but one never knows? I wrote one poem where I used some of what little German I could muster. I don't think it's in my collection here but I will try to rectify that soon. Thanks for commenting on one of my poems. Lloyd

| Posted on 2021-01-05 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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