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    dots Submission Name: The Forgotten Rose dots

    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 60/66/41
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Forgotten Rose dots

    I stare off into the distance.
    Waiting for my gardener,
    for I've budded in the wrong place.
    I try to focus on the sky,
    and the sun that shines.
    But I start to cry
    at the sight of a cloud
    that matches your face.
    I wonder if you've forgotten
    or if you even realize.
    The seed you planted
    had drifted away.
    The meadow around me
    is so unfamiliar.
    No one seems to know my name.
    The trees,
    I swear they laugh at me.
    Knowing my heartache
    as the leaves echo the same.
    I am a lone rose
    of the highest quality,
    but noone cares.
    Not even the rain.
    It trickles down the coming foilage.
    Snickering at my shame.
    Even the butterflies
    care not to visit.
    My pollen,
    the bees do not graze.
    So I wave in the wind
    in hope.
    Offering welcome
    to you friend.
    Remember me, yet?
    Look upon your garden again.
    See within your grain.
    That your precious rose
    is missing.
    Lost within the land.

    Submitted on 2021-03-10 13:45:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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