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    dots Submission Name: War-Wounddots
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    Author: Wolfwatching
    ASL Info:    28/Male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    7.52 - 98/142/127
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWar-Wounddots
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    Sitting on the sand till down came dream
    Like a movie playing in pharaoh's tomb
    Taking down your top playing the fool
    I processed the attempt to wound me
    I creaked out a Spartan laugh,
    Like Sparta so wounded and sorry in old age.

    And you picked yourself up, nudity demystified
    Worse than wounding was me waking
    In this bare world becoming stranger now.

    There's this memory of days in the grey sea
    You don't mean to be specific
    But then like every other night you come as dream
    There's this wound of the day in the grey sea;
    Like the memory of days in the grey sea.















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