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    dots Submission Name: Canovo 1dots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    3.99 - 138/249/165
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCanovo 1dots
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    Please love me even though i can’t:
    Dear grandad, i barely knew you - except
    that you smoked Belomor and were clever and thought
    i was too - though my mom
    said you were a loser.
    the sting from the rib,
    how its tubular structure gives in
    to marble -
    softly -
    and if I were to turn to stone - what would I look like?
    How would my left hand - is my right - be,
    forever airbrushed, pitiless and free?
    the nuances fade -
    my own Canovo curve: three veins
    in perfect parallel.




    Submitted on 2021-07-20 16:43:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very thought provoking, thanks.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2021-09-12 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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