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Canovo 1


Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 139 /258 /171
Words: 107
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Canovo 1



Please love me even though i can’t:
Dear grandad, i barely knew you - except
that you smoked Belomor and were clever and thought
i was too - though my mom
said you were a loser.
the sting from the rib,
how its tubular structure gives in
to marble -
softly -
and if I were to turn to stone - what would I look like?
How would my left hand - is my right - be,
forever airbrushed, pitiless and free?
the nuances fade -
my own Canovo curve: three veins
in perfect parallel.




Submitted on 2021-07-20 16:43:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very thought provoking, thanks.

Lloyd
| Posted on 2021-09-12 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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