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    dots Submission Name: the lovers by the lakedots
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    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 76/71/53
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       felt inspired after a walk around my favorite spot by the lake


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    dotsthe lovers by the lakedots
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    the passage of time was all but erased
    when it came to the lovers by the lake
    mothers would hurry their children past
    it did not phase the lovers by the lake
    indulging in their own embrace
    the soft, warm touch as he caressed her face

    a gentle breeze danced through the trees
    yet did not cool the lovers by the lake
    the titters and whispers of passers-by
    would not deter the lovers by the lake
    the heat of passion taking over
    as they held each other, their hearts soared

    the sun began to leave the sky
    say goodnight to the lovers by the lake
    twilight caresses where the sky meets the sea
    time to go for the lovers by the lake
    hours escape me when you are here
    so i return home and dream of your kiss




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