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Wrong at the Right Times


Author: Soulraven
ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 510 /484 /143
Words: 47
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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A little poem out of no where


Wrong at the Right Times



I feel all the wrong things at the right times. Surrounded by others feeling alone.
Parenting yet I’m a child inside.
Creating but really destroying.
Loving a person but selfishly.
I’m better then before but
Far too broken to be any good.




Submitted on 2021-08-27 15:27:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Short and powerful. Full of conflicting or juxtaposed emotions and ideas. Like the essence of humanity indeed. The words and ideas are great. The physical shape is strange. Maybe drop the second sentence down a line for symmetry. Or perhaps the lack thereof is the point.
| Posted on 2021-12-04 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]
  This kind of reminds me of a sad country song. Perhaps a sad country whisky drinking song. I suspect everyone feels this way at times but obviously some are better at hiding it than others. I think you mean "better than before" instead of "then" but that makes me a grammar nazi. This is an "old friends" piece to me, brings back memories.

Lloyd
| Posted on 2021-10-02 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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