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Wurmloch


Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 139 /258 /171
Words: 57
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Wurmloch



your voice-face jumps into our shared binary
universe, and for the first time,
my heart stands equanimous
in its unrequited arc. Perhaps,
this is how the fever dream ends, finally:
deep crimson setting purple twilight,
and so my heart
folds halfheartedly
over itself, a model
wormhole
undisputed






Submitted on 2021-10-18 17:25:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very technical incorporating a bit of physics. It carries a nice ring to it, the colors in particular.

Lloyd
| Posted on 2021-10-21 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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