Wurmloch

Author: expiring_touch ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 139 /258 /171 Words: 57

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Wurmloch

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your voice-face jumps into our shared binary universe, and for the first time, my heart stands equanimous in its unrequited arc. Perhaps, this is how the fever dream ends, finally: deep crimson setting purple twilight, and so my heart folds halfheartedly over itself, a model wormhole undisputed

Submitted on 2021-10-18 17:25:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Very technical incorporating a bit of physics. It carries a nice ring to it, the colors in particular. Lloyd

| Posted on 2021-10-21 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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