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    dots Submission Name: Wurmlochdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 139/254/170
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 87
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 396



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    dotsWurmlochdots
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    your voice-face jumps into our shared binary
    universe, and for the first time,
    my heart stands equanimous
    in its unrequited arc. Perhaps,
    this is how the fever dream ends, finally:
    deep crimson setting purple twilight,
    and so my heart
    folds halfheartedly
    over itself, a model
    wormhole
    undisputed






    Submitted on 2021-10-18 17:25:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very technical incorporating a bit of physics. It carries a nice ring to it, the colors in particular.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2021-10-21 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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