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Midterm


Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 139 /258 /171
Words: 96
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Midterm



My rage transforms by tremendous pressure
To misery-
Regret of beauty- should I have would have could have
Should‘ve— how much
this clarity of vision tears
into glib descent :
My graveyard of i-wishes

It does not hurt, not really, or am I too
Far gone to know
the difference - like sand sifts through
too much memory- T Mann and sewn on stars on bright blue
bikini bottoms— that north of Barcelona
beach where train tracks spilled
over
& took me
to the skies?




Submitted on 2021-11-05 21:03:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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