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Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173
Words: 58
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Just one hour till we land and rush
through Joburg, luggage & a sixth
Sense of each other’s presence.
A desperate Reflection in between-
are you the one? Should I
be patient, full of grace and
foreknowledge? - or should I take the silent
Vow and put the distance in-
so insurmountable for both-
of acquiescence

Submitted on 2021-11-18 05:16:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This asks an important question but leaves us looking for more of the story. I must wonder if something is often lost in translation from an original work but then I generally prefer something in rhyme also. German is extremely precise while English very often offers no end of possible meaning issues, sometimes useful but often gang aft agley. I had a German friend read on of my poems wherein I shifted between German and English and he seemed to think it was ok. The title is "Germ", which carries double meaning. That was from my more creative days.

| Posted on 2022-02-21 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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