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Test Poem

Author: One3Zero
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Words: 48
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Test Poem

The persistent flutter
of a distant tundra
laying upon the floor!

All white and grey
and smooth today,
All crisp upon the floor

No footprint yet,
Seems heaven sent
untouched by man nor beast

A fleeting glance
of pure romance
of weather I'm in awe

Submitted on 2022-02-13 19:34:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Nice imagery here, I'm definitely getting the stark feeling of snow.
One thing, I'm not sure the final stanza returning to the original flow fits well. Maybe if there were more to follow?

Good write all in though welcome to the forum.
| Posted on 2022-02-13 00:00:00 | by Localfreak | [ Reply to This ]

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