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promise


Author: CrypticBard
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Words: 45
Class/Type: Poetry /Lostfriend
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Fourteen days until your birthday, but you are no longer here. You have left us 10 weeks ago, Dad. All the special days are now another farewell.


promise



when
wriggly worms are done
with you
i shall await
sweet scent of blooms
that should some day
sprout and mark
this very spot
in which
you last
reclined
that is,
if i don't
follow
after you
soon


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Submitted on 2022-06-09 02:49:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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