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Hurt


Author: robbie
ASL Info:    20/m/mi
Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 53 /54 /37
Words: 136
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Hurt



I need an open field miles away
On a dark stormy kind of day
To scream and yell till my voice is hoarse
Just to let the anger take its course
Thunder will be the drum lightning the fire
Taking part in this primal dance until I tire
Just a release of this pain inside
It's just to the point it is so hard to hide
I hurt so bad and feel 3 inches tall
So I yell out and scream until I fall
The rain will hide the tears
Hopefully wash away those fears
I gladly let the storm wash over me
Take me away and set me free
I sit here and scream until my voice is hoarse
Letting it all go and take its course






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