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    dots Submission Name: Oiedots

    Author: Dalelord
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 22/23/8
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I wrote this poem a while back. I just remembered I had it on a different sight, thought I'd see what you guys have to say.

    I wrote it while studying for a French test.

    (Oie is goose in french)

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    The sun's presence is clear on this simple
    fall afternoon. But its word is blocked out
    by the cool whisper of the crisp fall

    The crunching of snow under my feet peirces
    my ears in the cold silence of the day. My
    boots ever so slowly filling with the
    melted snow from the blank, white, ground.

    In the distance a bellowing of honks
    intrudes the dead air. Above, a V of
    aviators speed across the sky. Their
    presence is demanding and untouchable as
    they soar overhead.

    The geese's company is clear for now, but
    will soon be unknown as the icy, harsh,
    winter sets in for another year.

    Submitted on 2004-08-07 23:26:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmmmm, i wrote something like this, except mine was dark and morbid. you show the lighter side of change, and i like it.
    ps - thanks for commenting on 'insomnia'. i read that steven king book "Rose Madder". it was intense. funny how it should remind you of it. i dunno. thanks for stoppin by!
    | Posted on 2004-08-07 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]
      don't forget about snow boarding And suger shacks wait a minut we don't have that any more yeah winter sucks.

    That is great, very discriptiveI could so see it as it was being discribed.verr nice , I would pick it apart but there is nothing to pick at good job keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-08-25 00:00:00 | by slybee22 | [ Reply to This ]

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