Destroy my love

Author: pioneerheart Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 208 /209 /143 Words: 107

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Destroy my love

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In the 4th year, there was lovely, excitement; innocent was my love for him Then, all that world crumbled The one was so full of Winter. He spat words of hatred with worms that burrowed holes in this velvet, heart Left me for dead, trashed my home drunk with a friend. How my death just came, but my living days are yours to blame All for you, it was tossed to the gloom Emptiness cursed my sad head and face Now, there disgraced Deface the fool Take my love, toss it the way you best know how Plead with fate, my heart rips like filthy rags

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My heart rips like filthy rags. That’s fucking poetry darling. Write every line like that and you’ll write something to be remembered. First line, 4th year? No significance. Why not just, once…? Anyways. Good write: amazing last line. Please continue

| Posted on 2022-10-05 00:00:00 | by leftof_red | [ Reply to This ]

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