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Julian's Faith

Author: pioneerheart
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Words: 64
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Julian's Faith

Suspicious hearts tatter
Away at love
He hears the hall
Deliver gloom
And, innocent calls
Out to you
No one stops saying
Regretful taints
Across like swords
That slay in face
Where's the mom?
He needs
To hold, she's gone
Julian's faith,
Two clasped hands whispers
For her
He learns to summon
And, the new day

Submitted on 2022-10-24 09:46:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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