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    dots Submission Name: come find medots
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    Author: AntiLife
    ASL Info:    16/m/fl
    Elite Ratio:    1.69 - 51/67/19
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Bytes: 517



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    dotscome find medots
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    To whom it may concern,

    this is the side that people never knew
    this is my pride, my only part true
    the part of me that is hidden down deep
    its is the truth that i wish u would seek
    for years ive been covered
    hoping to be discovered
    i know one day i'll be free
    and crush these fears to debris
    but for now i'll just look
    and keep myself put
    and i'll sit and i'll pray
    that u'll find me someday




    Submitted on 2004-08-08 01:29:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Just a comment on your rhyming scheme, some of the rhyming is not suitable at places. Look=put, free debris. Otherwise, a nice start. Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2004-08-08 00:00:00 | by sjayant | [ Reply to This ]



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