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    dots Submission Name: just a thoughtdots
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    Author: slybee22
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    5.59 - 93/64/27
    Words: 437
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
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       I just started typing these are the words that came forth from me I did not mean to write anything specific I guess this is just something my sub- conscious and my conscious (now that I think of it) are concerned with.


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    Here is not but fears, not but tears to cry. Not but ways to die.

    Slowly die from the inside letting my soul decay.

    All feeling slowly falls away fading away.

    The light of humanity is burning out at the intensity of our sun, none dear look directly at this act of tragic blindness & graceful submission.

    A death that rings throughout time itself, as the death of so many who have gone down in a blaze of glory, with a bang as they say , the rest those who die this slow death; in a frozen hell, all of our own.
    the truth is that the majority or humanity do not get that death of glory ,no the majority of humanity dies from the starvation of the soul, death by the diseases of the mind ; one by one we all fall we spread it ignorantly its impact is felt over the span of centuries, till the turns on the body we become so twisted we recognize ourselves on and attacks only the body attacks itself the physical body we attempt to cure ailments but they are only Physical manifestations of the diseases of the mind , A thus manifest in other ways till we can't find a cure and finally we die but we all die in the end with way would you rather go out personally I want my death to be wit a clear mind a clean soul children and grand children left behind.

    Anyway you look at it death will come, so make peace with it now.

    Make the most of this gift given to us, the souls inhabiting mortal bodies.

    Make the most of this gift by living each day ever learning, loving, the earth itself and all on it.
    We truly have something beautiful, yet we stain it everyday in every way.

    We stain it by not stopping to see what we have.
    We constantly want more, more, more it dose not truly matter of what. We destroy or environment without a second thought of future generations, just think another Ice age just around the bend.

    We are all caught up in a downslide, and it seems all right now, we are all enjoying the ride but just wait until we hit bottom.

    If this life is all a test and the results are based on how we lived and how it all ends here, think! Will we pass this test, who is testing us and why?

    Just a thought





    Submitted on 2004-08-08 01:31:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dandi, if I caught the messege correctly in this poem I love it. Its sort of a statement of good-will. A depressive poem against depression, a frightening poem against fear. Free verse is a wonderful way, and you do it well. I like it!
    | Posted on 2004-08-08 00:00:00 | by Dalelord | [ Reply to This ]


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