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    dots Submission Name: Disdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 22
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDisdots
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    This is not to dis you,
    but I don't even miss you.
    I never really realized
    that I never really loved you.




    Submitted on 2004-02-17 07:17:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Not your usual, but I like it! Btw, Judy, "dis" = "jone"= to make a denigrating comment on another. Slang is an amazing thing... so regional. This is a very quick, very punchy read. Very "lightbulb"! Nice work! <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-22 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      sorry - i must be from another planet but what is "Dis"? Is it any reference to the Roman God of the underworld (a.k.a. Pluto)?
    | Posted on 2004-02-18 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm... short and not very poetic. The subject could be expanded... but you'd have to try a little harder/think a little more. Don't take this offensively.
    | Posted on 2004-02-17 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with crash about sounding like a case of writers block, Trust me I know, I have it myself. The worst thing to get.. but then this short little piece has it quility and not just being short sweet and to the point...Well you are getting your point across
    | Posted on 2004-02-17 00:00:00 | by TastemyTears | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really old piece in which I was just playing with words. I know it sounds "off" for me to use a word like dis.
    | Posted on 2004-02-17 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      seems there is a bad case of writers block going around that is very contagious... this piece threw me, not in a bad way... just not what I normally see from you... the reps in the last two lines tongue tied me, but its still a to the point short piece... Im not even going to say the c word... Im still stumped on a rewrite that you may have fun with... kind of a play on words with real eyes, real lies, and realize... I just cant seem to pull it together... nice work
    | Posted on 2004-02-17 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]


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