I love this piece, your so right with what your saying in it...yeah I understand the need to vent whats going on in ones head, but I too have had enough of reading pieces that make the author the martre. It's like yeah there are s.hitty days, but you gotta keep going. Excellent write in soooooo few words.
haha...loved it...i wrote something similar a while back after being on this site after midnight and reading 50 i wanna kill myself poems...i've lightened up a bit cause i understand it's a phase...we just have to bear it...it's all usually a cry for attention...great way to open up and say it out loud though...bravo...
Ooh. You changed it. I like it better now. It feels more… self-aware… like watching yourself, mocking your own self-pity. Um, yeah. It's just better. *Thumbs-up*. I don't think you need a question-mark after 'do us all a favour' though.
i dont know if you added in the 'note to self' bit after.. but it's pretty obvious with that what it's about.. without it might have been a bit vague.
anyway.. this is very biting... and yet has it's own twisted form of beauty to it.. i always feel weird saying something like this is beautiful but it is.. i dont know why i thought of roses when i read it.. but for some reason.. i could see roses.. strange.. excellent poem.
ok... maybe its the title confusing... but this isn't what you think it is... i know it's nasty to read.. trust me i felt it when i wrote it... take a step back... maybe the description??? i'm not saying anymore... want to see if someone gets it...
Well, I've been suicidal in the past, and I've known a couple of people who killed themselves, so I don't think people should kill themselves, but some people put it on as an act for sympathy. These people have no intention of ever doing it though. They just want people to tell them that they're pretty, talented, etc.
very powerful...wow hm, well i just read this other really awesome poem on this site about people who talk about killing themselves b/c their life isnt fair, blahblah...im thinkin this has the same "drift"... i liked it, even though some people may get insulted by this-its ur thoughts and i respect that
…Didn't have a huge effect on me. It's the kind of poem that strikes me as pretty easy to write. Not that there's anything wrong with that (or maybe there is) but it kind of relies on a shock impact to impress, and when faced with someone in a blase mood (as I am) it just falls flat. Bah. Sorry to be such a Scrooge about it. It does capture a bitterness and self-hatred vividly enough, it has strength of feeling on its side, and I sincerely hope it's not from personal experience… Becky
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