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    dots Submission Name: Nashville Saw the Lightdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       I'm not a fan of Country music at all, but my granny is. I can remember her playing Hank Williams all of the time when I was little. Her favorite Hank song is his religious song "I Saw the Light." I always liked the idea in mythology that divine beings amuse themselves with mortal lives. I hope that doesn't offend anyone.


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    An angel
    with a prop bottle of Jack Daniels in hand
    impersonates Hank Williams on a Nashville stage,
    his feathered wings hidden beneath a western shirt,
    his halo beneath a cowboy hat.
    He sounds a bit sweeter than Hank,
    but for a moment,
    the audience cried into their beers
    then "saw the light"
    as he flew back to the Grand Old Opry in the sky.






    Submitted on 2004-08-11 05:03:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, I love that idea. It's amazing the poem you got out of it. Not much else to say here, other than that I thorougly enjoyed this.

    -emo.
    | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, you never can know for sure, can you? Maybe they do come and play with us. That is not so hard to believe..maybe we inspire them.

    This is really cute. I liked this piece a lot. The refrence to crying in their beers was fabulous.

    "There's a tear in my beer cuz i'm crying for you dear."...I got a smile from this poem!
    | Posted on 2004-08-13 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the idea of this angel amusing himself as Hank Williams! i, too, am not a fan of country musicl, at least not the present day shi.t they write and sing. i do like Hank, though. and you can't really go wrong with Lyle Lovett, though he crosses over a lot to folky/rocky stuff. this sorta made me think of the movie Michael with John Travolta. he had these cool wings hidden beneath his coat. the women all swooned for him, not knowing him to be an angel. and he smelled so sweet, like cookies or cotton candy! this was a great idea, Amy, and, kinda reminds me that we never know when we may be entertaining angels in our lives! fav!
    | Posted on 2004-08-11 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice little piece with a humorous tone. Yes, itís a bit irreverent, but not too much. I like the way you dress this angel, and have the patrons cry into their beers. BTW, Iíve also wondered if they ever get bored with singing praise hymns and want to rock. :-)
    | Posted on 2004-08-11 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      This angel is putting on a good show. I'm sorry if my comment threw you. The last line is an improvement, but the first beginning was better artistically. Well, you'll know what I mean, 'cause I don't think anyone else saw it. I also do not think that more than 0.1% of people would share my opinion...as it was. This is still excellent though.
    | Posted on 2004-08-11 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      personally i think the angel should stick to heavenly worshipness music... anything but country! but i like how you dressed the angel up yet it was still obvious that he wasnt the real thing...and the ppl crying into their beers... style! good write!
    | Posted on 2004-08-11 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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