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    dots Submission Name: Reign of Firedropsdots
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    Author: halopop
    ASL Info:    25/f/FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 167/141/21
    Words: 315
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 572
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1913



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       coming out is hard to do...


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    dotsReign of Firedropsdots
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    can't you hear?
    can't you hear my fear?
    anticipation of this revelation
    expecting only grave humiliation
    from the secret kept within
    way down deep beneath my skin
    to pretend that it will end all by itself,
    a malicious fantasy that is
    destroying my mental health
    whisper a prayer to the goddess
    with my knees upon the sand
    tears of fire scald my face
    and burn holes in my hand
    secrets and lies are the seeds i have sown
    cast aside my veil and let my life become my own
    shadows of deceit are all i see overhead
    while the firedrops of truth
    turn my eyes crimson red
    i look inside myself and
    see the tidal waves of pain
    overflow in my soul while the firedrops rain
    down on me,
    for all to see,
    may the Powers that be
    grant a moment of tranquility
    within me... so finally
    for once my heart will be free.
    gather my strength to stand up,
    face the crowd,
    yelling so loud that the gods would be proud
    and my voice is on fire...
    it's starting to smoke
    aimed right at their pride,
    they're starting to choke
    they're gasping for air,
    falling out of their chairs
    pulling out their hair
    "come on, I challenge anyone who dares
    to make me feel disgraced
    & run out of this place!
    Let my fire slap you square in your face..."
    i just need you to hear my confessions of fear
    as my pain disappears
    drowned in these fiery tears
    that have been falling for years...
    you will let me be,
    let my spirit see what it means to be free
    away from the chains of my captivity,
    the doubt,
    the fear,
    which all of you now hear...




    Submitted on 2004-02-17 18:34:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, i bow down before you...you've put my writting to shame...This piece is so undescribably amazing...you got a talent within you that shines so brightly and i'm so very happy to be here to gaze upon it...The feeling and the power of these words flow so smoothly and beautifuly...The strength that is shown by this character is inspiring...To face the torment and ridicule and still be able to find the power to stand up and face the crowd with head held high...To give it all in order to present your message...simply wonderful...I'm going to call this one a masterpiece and if you don't mind, make it one of my favorites...Congradulations...you've moved me so greatly...thank you again...I hope you find your happieness...Travis
    | Posted on 2004-09-10 00:00:00 | by Mwa Ha Ha Ha Ha | [ Reply to This ]
      i would have to agree with INU, i like the fact that you kept it all together, it makes it seem very rythmic and almost lyrical. also, i like the fact that you never name "them" specifically...allowing people to bring it more to a personal level for whoever is reading it, your writting is definently something to follow closley
    | Posted on 2004-06-28 00:00:00 | by Sky McEntire | [ Reply to This ]
      all i gotta say is WOW... wow... WOW! this has got to go on my favorites lists, because i can relate to every word you said here.. coming out.. well, i did it when i was 18, and the pain and the rejection sent me on a spin for a very long time... i actually like the way it was all in one chunk, because that's the way it feels.. there is no break. write on, sister friend!
    | Posted on 2004-07-16 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      ouchhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
    "crimson red" should be banned for being wayyyyyyyyyy overused and outdated... flow and rhyme work out but some of the rhyming carries to much weight from being forced.... nice imagery with teardrops of fire.... nice one.... keep em original and keep em coming
    | Posted on 2004-02-18 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]



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