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Author: Deep Ace Thinks
ASL Info:    35/M/ Spring, TX
Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 124 /190 /60
Words: 118
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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"breathe" translated into spanish


Escribiendo cosas que me gustaría decir
mis palabras,
mis pensamientos,
mi deseo de permanecer,
desligado de todo lo que está a mi alcance hoy.

y respiro...
pensando en las formas que me gustaría que sintieras
mi corazón,
mis manos,
y las cosas que hacen que los días reales
se desvanezcan en semanas,
y las semanas en años;
pensamientos en recuerdos,
a medida que vamos enfrentando nuestros miedos.

y respiramos...
aire que ha fluído a través de los pulmones de nuestros fantasmas
y vida que ha olvidado mucho más que mucho;
maneras de perdonar,
tiempo para olvidar;
suerte de pocos,
cosas que lamentar.

y respiramos...

Submitted on 2004-08-11 13:58:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Spanish always sounds so darn SEXY! You could be writing take the garbage out or hey dumb ass you're on the wrong side of the road and I would be all swoozy!
Hope all is well w/you fellow wordsmith! My trip to Houston didn't evolve so I'm still in CA. Hope all is well with you & it seems you are quite astute at Spanish Senor! Love, Peace, Joy, Grace, Faith!
| Posted on 2004-08-12 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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