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French Limonade

Author: Ontlogicalamity
ASL Info:    33/M/NY
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Class/Type: Poetry /Nostalgia
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Okay, I'm still away, but a quick post because I wrote this here. Mondy I got to see the girl I've written so much about thus far, and we spent a wonderful day in Colonial Williamsburg. This is an account of a short scene at a cafe.

French Limonade

"It doesn't quite taste like lemons," I said.
"More like Sprite, or lemon-lime."
"Maybe that's just the way the French like it."
The conversation strayed off for a time.

She went to the restroom, and when she returned,
I had brightly figured it out.
"Look, it says 'Limonade,' a play on words.
Of it's lemon-lime-ness, I've no doubt."

She thought for a minute, then shot me back down.
"The French don't say it that way.
As I recall from my classes, un limon is a lemon.
This has no lime en Francais."

"Arg! I've been foiled, you're obviously right."
I hung my head in stupid shame.
Then we both laughed and I eventually bought
Another bottle of French Limonade.

Submitted on 2004-08-11 16:38:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I have to say Aaron over the many years Ive known you, the past 2 months youve surprised me in a good way. Showing more of your humanity then in the past. I mean by this what you say seems much less calculated then honest these days. Whatevers gotten into you to make it so I hope it never fades...and I am very intrigued to met this LAdy of whom you speak so highly...I dont think I could ever take such a simple scene in my own life and capture it so sweetley...good show sir!
| Posted on 2004-08-11 00:00:00 | by Mithrandir | [ Reply to This ] sacharride...damn, its like somethin you'd see on like Step by Step or something...just kidding! maybe Saved By the Bell, between Zack and that chick he was always into; how i hated her because he was sooo gorgeous, <gag>...thanks for the trip down memory lane...but no, seriously, i think its quite adorable. made me chuckle, such conversations happen all the time between two people, you witness the chatter at cafes and places and sometimes i see gestures and wonder what they're talking latah~
| Posted on 2004-08-11 00:00:00 | by leper messiah | [ Reply to This ]
  that was pretty funny! she thinks she's all that now because she can speak a little French... haha! this was good considering you wrote it here on the spot!
| Posted on 2004-08-11 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
  reminds me of those Jim Varney commercials for limon, or whatever that was. Very well written, keep going, and writing, and having girls shoot you down about citrus-related beverages.
| Posted on 2004-08-11 00:00:00 | by WD20x2 | [ Reply to This ]

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