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    dots Submission Name: Great Spiritdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       For even is beauty barren at times glorious.



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    dotsGreat Spiritdots
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    As a bird
    spreads its wings
    to soar...
    So has God
    given us as
    feathers of Himself
    Nay are we
    in the shadows
    of flight
    Enveloped in protection
    encouraged to fly
    in light




    Submitted on 2004-08-11 16:52:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey, only knock I have here is the archaic Nay.
    It's a nice idea. And speaking of wings, did you see the one I have called Small Death, I'd like your input.
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-08-11 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this piece about the Great Spirit. i love the image of us as "feathers of Himself." and how you say no, we aren't flying in the dark, we are simply enveloped by his shining light. simply beautiful.
    | Posted on 2004-08-11 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      The Great Spirit, has many names and many followers. I expected to view an American Indian style of writing, but then the Great Spirit, is onipresent is he not!
    I do whole heartedly agree with the message and entire writing. God will bless you, for spreading His messages. I guarantee it.
    | Posted on 2004-10-27 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      OK, so I read the comments too, and I agree, there's nothing to fix here. It's a good theme with a nice crescendo to the end. On my page there's "invention" which I think you'd like. See what you think. Good write! nansofast
    | Posted on 2004-11-01 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      I love how you write simple poems. This is an awesome one. Definitly going into my favs. I just love how it speaks tremendously with few words. *smattering of applause*
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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