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the girl stays


Author: brokenmirror
ASL Info:    150/f/duiuwy89
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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i dont even know what to make of this...does it make sense to u at all? and if so, please tell me what u get from it...or what u think...or something to help me out here


the girl stays



the bird lifts his wings: it is free to fly off into the isolated sky
toward the darkened night, with the moon guiding his path
there is nothing left, there is no one left
just like the bird, the boy does the same
he leaves his home in spite, in vain
no forgiven words to clear his mind
only disturbing thoughts to linger and eat away
the boy is alone, there is nothing left
now the opposite comes into play
when the girl is given the decision
to run, or stay
she contemplates for a very long time
and decides to stay. she does not wish to be alone
like the bird, like the boy
the girl resembles the bright moon
once guiding the birds path
she stays, and trys to help the others that dont
by giving them some type of light
by giving them hope
the girls stays




Submitted on 2004-08-11 22:35:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Okay is this about a couple that was together? And the boy committed suicide, and the girl thought to do the same but decided to stay??
I don't know, I may have totally misinterpreted this piece. Let me know if I was right. lol
| Posted on 2004-08-12 00:00:00 | by Amberdy | [ Reply to This ]


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