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    dots Submission Name: Hampton The Hamsterdots
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    Author: PolaroidMemory
    ASL Info:    18/F/IN
    Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 99/93/28
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 486
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    Description:
       I wrote this poem for my little sister. We have hamsters and she wanted me to write something about them..so here it is. Hope you enjoy it!


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    dotsHampton The Hamsterdots
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    He rolls around in his little ball.
    He's having fun until he hits the wall.
    He rolls away, dazed and confused
    After he plays, he takes a snooze.

    It's early morning when he wakes up.
    He takes a sip from his water cup.
    He even gets a bite to eat
    He takes a walk on his little feet.

    After his walk, he heads back home.
    Back to his house, his hamster dome.
    He's tired again so he takes a nap
    His owner holds him, safe in her lap.

    He feels safe, he feels secure.
    He's Hampton The Hamster...that's for sure.




    Submitted on 2004-08-13 01:44:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like it...so original! i read it 2 my friend, who loves hamsters, and she likes it, too. i only have one critique...some of the rhymes seem sort of forced...but it's understandable, i suppose.
    | Posted on 2004-08-15 00:00:00 | by Checkered Cow | [ Reply to This ]
      i like ur icon, Jack Black is so cool. hehe "he's having fun until he hits the wall" good line... my guinea pigs always play games, involving butt-sniffing. its kinda nasty, but i guess small rodents have their quirks.
    | Posted on 2004-08-13 00:00:00 | by WD20x2 | [ Reply to This ]
      awww... that reminded me a whole lot of when i had a hamster back in the day... i'm thinking you could almost make this into a riddle, and take away the words "hampster" in the poem and title, and then people could try to guess what your poem is about! haha, just a thought...
    | Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by Sizo Nqoba | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this witty little thing you've got going on here. it's cute. you just made me feel good, and that's what comedy is all about.
    | Posted on 2004-08-13 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]



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